HELP PLEASE?? grammar help? does it makes sense and should I turn it in? could u tell me what I should fix? - homemade boat with cans
The determination and discipline are the keys to success. Certainly they have, together with Malcolm X, then in prison, you copy the entire dictionary. As Malcolm said: "The attempt to write in plain English, not only was not articulate, I was not functional" (Malcolm 2). I found myself sitting in a boat. In fact, reading a series of education, which motivates me to study more, so that one day I so smooth and perfect as Malcolm X. Leave "can only begin after an action, I started to copy" (Malcolm 6). Certainly, I could not imagine to avoid copying the entire dictionary, because they are too complex method to achieve a particular goal. In addition, I am not only impatient but undisciplined. When I was a copy of the dictionary that could perfectly recall the importancethe first word. Suddenly I was not able to concentrate more and little things that caught my attention. I've learned that I am determined not Malcolm or discipline to complete the entire dictionary. Malcolm was a warrior, not to be behind someone, but on the substance. I'm really of what Malcolm X achieved fascinated. Malcolm constantly challenged himself and never let their expectations and was a great leader.
Wednesday, February 17, 2010
Homemade Boat With Cans HELP PLEASE?? Grammar Help? Does It Makes Sense And Should I Turn It In? Could U Tell Me What I Should Fix?
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HI-this sounds great! You do not choice of words, etc. Good job miracle. Here are a few minor grammatical changes, which I think is would help to articulate their meanings:
The determination and discipline are the keys to success. Finally, these adjectives worked with Malcolm X, then in prison for copying the entire dictionary. As Malcolm said: "try to write in plain English, not only did not articulate, I was not functional" (Malcolm 2). I find myself sitting in a boat. Playing in fact, a number of education that motivates me to study more, so I can write some day so smooth and perfect as Malcolm X, "only to finally begin an action, I began to copy" (Malcolm 6). Certainly, I could not imagine copying the entire dictionary, because I tTo avoid complicated method to achieve a particular goal. In addition, I am not only impatient but undisciplined. When I made a copy of the dictionary, I can very well recall the importance of the first word. Suddenly I was not able to concentrate more and little things that caught my attention. I've learned that I am determined not Malcolm or discipline to complete the entire dictionary. Malcolm was a warrior, not to be behind someone, but on the substance. I'm really of what Malcolm X achieved fascinated. Malcolm constantly challenged himself and never let their expectations and was a great leader.
There are some grammatical errors. I suggest that parents or adult corrections and the error highlight because it is difficult to do in a small text box in Yahoo.
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